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You clearly know your primary text extremely well and there are some strong opinions offered on media bias and criminal justice, However...
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[] You don't consistently focus on the question. Your topic sentences are a good example of this - not many contain the word 'bias' or explicitly develop your argument.
[] You Briefly raise a very interesting argument that new technology and/or financial pressure on institutions is ruining the documentary genre. You need to make more of this.
[] Another key aspect keeping you out of the top level is research and referencing. Although your bibliography is good (formatting issues aside) there is very little evidence of this research in your essay ... you should be looking for close to double the footnotes - particularly academic research discussing bias in documentary genre.
[] Another aspect holding you back is written English - sentence structure, paragraph structure, quite a few basic errors (plantation/plating e.g)
WWW-
You clearly know your primary text extremely well and there are some strong opinions offered on media bias and criminal justice, However...
EBI-
[] You don't consistently focus on the question. Your topic sentences are a good example of this - not many contain the word 'bias' or explicitly develop your argument.
[] You Briefly raise a very interesting argument that new technology and/or financial pressure on institutions is ruining the documentary genre. You need to make more of this.
[] Another key aspect keeping you out of the top level is research and referencing. Although your bibliography is good (formatting issues aside) there is very little evidence of this research in your essay ... you should be looking for close to double the footnotes - particularly academic research discussing bias in documentary genre.
[] Another aspect holding you back is written English - sentence structure, paragraph structure, quite a few basic errors (plantation/plating e.g)
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